Wednesday, 10 April 2013

The spooky home!

 There was  a  home that  was green and  in side the holo home there was soft ground and when I went into the home the door was sqekey!and it had ice on the door! The path had rocks on it it was fantastic!! The moon was shining in the sky.

This is my draft piece of writing. Please leave a comment about what I did well and what I need to work on.


  1. Hi Chloe
    It's great to see you underlined your words to check. Can you use a dictionary to find the correct spelling.
    I like how you described the moon shining in the sky. Next time you could add an ending to your story.
    Mrs Natusch

    1. TO mrs Natusch
      Thank you for commenting on my spooky story.
      From Chloe.